Dain Hiro

[sameal]

Basics

• Name: Dain Hiro
  
• Alias: Demon
  
• Race: Human(England)
  
• Class: Thief
  
• Weapon: Death Gloves- A pair of gloves that bring a great deal of power to the wearer. They have a charm on them to do that, it is an old spell that people used to assassinate people and was thought to knock their soul out, but they were wrong.
  
  Drunken Fist- A style of hand to hand that Dain uses when he is a little drunk. As he gets more drunk his power gets much more powerful.
  
  Bubble Froth- An aged wine that is a powerful alcoholic beverage that make Dain way more drunk. Deadlishly adds to Dain's drunken fist power.
  

Appearance

• Gender: Male
  
• Age: 16
  
• Height: 5'8"
  
• Weight: 114 lbs
  
• Hair: Black
  
• Eyes: Green, Like triangular sort of...
  
• Attire: (Picture^clothes)
  

PersonalityHe is abnormally secretive and almost never talks in a combat situation. He is more a man of action than of words anyway. In a friendly situation, he is kind to all, he actually becomes quite talkitive. He has some great friendship skills...Somehow.

• Overall personality: Dire, but nice.
  
• Likes:
  -People
  -Tough Battles
  -Good Days
  -Most days of the week.
  
  
• Dislikes:
  -Monsters
  -Easy Fights
  -Bad Days
  -Mondays
  
• Marital Status/Love Interest: Single
  
• Family:
  Mother: Shana Hiro- Brown hair, slim, 5'6" Deceased
  Father: Zieg Hiro- Brown Hair, Mildly thick, 6'4" Deceased
  
• Friends: None really.
  
• Enemies/Rivals: Others looking for soul edge.
  

history:
He was raised in a really boring family. They had no intrest that were the same as him. He actually had no intrests until he witness a drunken street fight. An old drunk man versus a sober street punk with a knife. It was obviously a on sided battle. That was what Samael thought. He couldn't belive his eyes when he saw the outcome of the fight. The old drunk guy won! After this he knew to never misjudge an enemy no matter what.

As he grew up he got into many street fights and won them all, nobody could beat him. He wasn't satisfied by the street punks here. He never fought on a monday ever. He hated to kill someone on a bad day like monday. He grew up in new theif like enviroment later after he killed the rest of his boring family that wouldn't let him leave until he did so. But, by killing his family he unleashed a force withing that he knew shouldn't have been released.

He unleashed the power of the wrath sin. With this sin he needs to fight once a day, if he doesn't, he suffers thorough agony. This is the key reason that he hates mondays. He then figured out a way to rid himself of this evil power. He had to look for soul edge and destroy it. If he didn't, the sin would kill him...on a Monday. Though this power was great and he can channel rage through his awesome gloves, he never fought on a monday. And that may be his downfall.

[Kizer]

You seem to really have some issues with Monday. Anyway, I have some issues with your character. To save us both some time, I'll just go ahead and put them in a checklist like formant.

-Your name makes it hard to understand just where you came from your a ninja with the name of Samael Daimon?

-Your weapon is not that of a Ninja. If you want to use an axe, your class is defiantly Barbarian (and it probably works a lot better for your story too considering it just seems like his only interest is fighting things).

-Even if your family is "boring", they still existed. Your still expected to put them down and if they are dead put down (deceased)

-In order to be a ninja, you need to be born into it. You can't be some random kid who decides he wants to be a ninja. If you want a ninja-ish job, Assassin or Thief seems to work well for your character, considering what caused him to even consider such a thing was bar fighting.

-Light weight metals are weak, and to make a weapon out of it is a terrible idea. It would shatter on impact to something like a sword and since it's an axe, meant to be a powerful, overwhelming weapon, it defeats the purpose entirely.

-This is optional, but if you can add a little more feeling to your bio, that would be great. It seems to linear and straight forward, like your leaving a lot out. Please take the time you need to write something truly beautiful and really think about it. We encourage that 100% here. For example, the part about him just killing his family really doesn't leave much to the imagination.

[sameal]

Fixed.

[Kizer]

the bio is still eyeballing me but you did fix what was asked. Also, don't think I don't see that Bleach reference with the glove.

-Accepted